Meet, Date, Time, Sex
Well, this is really an experiment just to see what works/doesn’t. I’m not sure which I like better right now. But these things have a way of being sorted out when you look at it long enough.
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Awesome Eric. I like how you placed “the” and “her” infront of the solitary words. It adds character. With sex I’d add “laughter” or “moans” or “bedsheets,” maybe even “touch” or “body” – just for intimacy value. But other than that this is great.
One thing that popped up yesterday that bothers me about this poem is the use of ‘sex’ in the title and heading. I want to use something else. I think sex is too raw and emotionless for what I want to convey.And thanks for the input. I’ll ponder on it.
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